She stood still like a stone…. Trying to absorb what just happened.

She looked at them down at her feet… lying helpless… lifeless… but she felt indifferent today.

These were the very people who dared to violate her… repeatedly… day after day… was it her fault that she was born in a family of laborer and them in a higher caste?

She didn’t think of consequences today… she didn’t trust in the police anymore… she took reigns in her own hands when they pounced on her today… it was not the sickle, she realized she got the power from her courage… from her want to lead a life of dignity.

Standing alone in the raintoday, she felt calm, she felt the almighty washing away the dirt… she felt pure again.


This post is for Lillie McFerrin Writes Five Sentence Fiction for the prompt RAIN. 

Also linking this to The Ultimate Blog Challenge July 2014 as my Day 17 post

Tina Basu

35 Comments on Five Sentence Fiction – Standing in the Rain

  1. skonrath
    July 18, 2014 at 1:39 am (5 years ago)

    I like that…my imagination starts running wild after these five sentences. Well done, Tina.

  2. Indrajit
    July 18, 2014 at 4:04 am (5 years ago)

    Very Well written.Keep it up.

  3. Tina Basu
    July 18, 2014 at 4:07 am (5 years ago)

    Thank you Skonrath

  4. Tina Basu
    July 18, 2014 at 4:07 am (5 years ago)

    Thank you 🙂

  5. Shilpa Gupte
    July 18, 2014 at 8:49 am (5 years ago)

    Very beautifully written, Tina!

  6. Soumya
    July 18, 2014 at 11:10 am (5 years ago)

    I'm glad she did. This was powerful Tina!

  7. Tina Basu
    July 18, 2014 at 11:28 am (5 years ago)

    Thanks Ayesha

  8. Tina Basu
    July 18, 2014 at 11:29 am (5 years ago)

    Thanks Shilpa

  9. Tina Basu
    July 18, 2014 at 11:32 am (5 years ago)

    Thanks Soumya

  10. blackbeauty
    July 18, 2014 at 1:03 pm (5 years ago)

    Nobody helps nobody nowadays,specially if you are poor. Great thing that the girl took charge. Nice post

  11. injaynesworld
    July 18, 2014 at 7:23 pm (5 years ago)

    A powerful representation of so much going on in this world right now, especially where women are concerned.

  12. Freya Writes
    July 20, 2014 at 12:05 pm (5 years ago)

    Right and wrong are not always easy to define, hmm? Well done.

  13. Anupat G
    July 20, 2014 at 3:34 pm (5 years ago)

    A very good post…:)

  14. umangawasthi
    July 21, 2014 at 5:03 am (5 years ago)

    Well penned! Your words have portrayed well the taboo she is going through inside.

  15. Shailaja V
    July 21, 2014 at 6:00 am (5 years ago)

    I like the fact that I wrote my post before reading yours 🙂 It is similar in theme but different in ending. Looks like she took things into her own hands. Well done, Tina.

  16. Tina Basu
    July 21, 2014 at 6:35 am (5 years ago)

    true Jayne… the world isn't quite a safe place

  17. Tina Basu
    July 21, 2014 at 6:35 am (5 years ago)

    thanks Britton

  18. Tina Basu
    July 21, 2014 at 6:36 am (5 years ago)

    yes not easy at all… thanks Freya

  19. Tina Basu
    July 21, 2014 at 6:36 am (5 years ago)

    Thanks Anupat

  20. Tina Basu
    July 21, 2014 at 6:38 am (5 years ago)

    I read your post Shailaja… its a very nice post.

  21. Vinodini Iyer
    July 21, 2014 at 10:01 am (5 years ago)

    More power to such women Tina. Tragic yet motivating tale Tina.

  22. thewritersvillage
    July 21, 2014 at 10:59 am (5 years ago)

    Where the land is not on your side, your hand has to be….

  23. Tina Basu
    July 22, 2014 at 5:30 am (5 years ago)

    Thanks Priyanka

  24. Tina Basu
    July 22, 2014 at 5:31 am (5 years ago)

    Yes its a tragic situation for women in this society

  25. Tina Basu
    July 22, 2014 at 5:32 am (5 years ago)

    Very true Randy

  26. Reema D'souza
    July 22, 2014 at 5:41 am (5 years ago)

    Superb! The story is great. It is good that she took the things in her hands rather than continuing to face the insults!

  27. Uma
    July 22, 2014 at 5:41 am (5 years ago)

    More power to the girl! Very nicely penned, Tina!

  28. penkissespaper
    July 22, 2014 at 9:07 am (5 years ago)

    A powerfully tragic tale. I think you portrayed her life struggle and eventual indifference to the people who had hurt her really well.

  29. Jyotsna Bhatia
    July 26, 2014 at 5:22 pm (5 years ago)

    More power to every woman to fight such people. Good take on the prompt Tina 🙂


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