There was a fraughtof silence.

Mahima was too tensed… she didn’t know what to answer now. But more than that she was worried… very worried for Mayank.

It was well past 1 in the night, and he was not back home.

“You will not try to save him tonight. Is that clear?” stated an angry Raj.


Mahima thought it’s best to remain silent now or Raj might just erupt, he was tired of his son’s partying escapades.

“This is the time he should be worried about making a career… and what is your son doing… partying till 1?”

“I’ll try his phone”

“I have been trying his phone for past half an hour… he has not even bothered to pick it up”

Mahima knew her husband better, behind this hard exterior of anger, he was worried inside for his son.

“Mayank has become a nocturnalanimal… boys from honorable and respectable families do not spend their nights in random parties. Who knows if he is snorting something?”

“Mayank will never do such a thing, he is just a teenager…”

“Mahima, you don’t know… times are not like when we were young. I have to be strict with him or else he will ruin his life like this”.

Mahima remained silent, but Raj’s words made her think what if Mayank really had got into any such inclination. The silence in the room was broken by the ringing phone.

“Is this Raj Malhotra” asked the voice.

“Yes”…

“You have to come to Bhaba Hospital, Bandra”

“Hospital??? Why??? Who is this?”

“I am inspector Hemant… I am afraid your son has met with an accident, he and his friends were racing bikes on the Sea Link in an inebriated state, Mayank is in the ICU and is serious. We need you to come here at once”…

The phone fell from his grip… Raj couldn’t hear properly what Mahima was going on asking… he only had one thing in head… a silent prayer for his son to be alive.



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Post written for Three Words Wednesday for the prompts – Fraught, Honorable and Nocturnal.

This is also my Day 16 Post for UBC July 2014.
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Tina Basu

18 Comments on Short Fiction – The Phone Call

  1. Jae Rose
    July 16, 2014 at 2:45 pm (2 years ago)

    Not knowing is the worst feeling…we can deal with problems if we know what they are…you capture the tension well

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  2. Usha Menon
    July 16, 2014 at 3:26 pm (2 years ago)

    Oh God, what the parents would have felt ! Very gripping story.

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  3. Arnoldo L. Romero, MLA
    July 16, 2014 at 3:48 pm (2 years ago)

    Wow! As a father of 2 teenage daughters, I could truly relate to the intensity of this passage. Blessings!

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  4. Judy Yaron
    July 16, 2014 at 5:25 pm (2 years ago)

    The phone call every parent dreads. I agree with Jae Rose – not know is the worst feeling. You build the tension well. What, Tina, made you write this story? HUGS <3

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  5. Sheilagh Lee
    July 16, 2014 at 10:29 pm (2 years ago)

    that's a sad call the one any parent fears. I hope it wasn't your fear that prompted the writing. if it was hugs

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  6. oldegg
    July 17, 2014 at 12:00 am (2 years ago)

    How often this must happen. Teenagers want to lead exciting lives and peer pressure allows them to lose a sense of judgement. Let's hope in the scene you created a happy outcome is achieved.

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  7. vishalbheeroo
    July 17, 2014 at 3:33 am (2 years ago)

    Very well narrated on an issue that plague many youngsters. It's heart wrenching and parents need to know with whom their kids hang around with.

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  8. Sophie Bowns
    July 17, 2014 at 11:57 am (2 years ago)

    Oh God!
    That was terribly sad, I cannot even begin to imagine what your character must be going through. I hope that you continue the scene!

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  9. Soumya
    July 17, 2014 at 1:49 pm (2 years ago)

    Oh sad. I hope Mayank makes it.

    So many parents face this same dilemma these days. I even lost a very young cousin the same way. He was 19 and speeding on the highway fully drunk. He had to meet an end.

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    July 17, 2014 at 2:48 pm (2 years ago)

    A tragedy and not knowing the worst can be most traumatic! Wonderful write Tina!

    Hank

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