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Five Sentence Fiction – Looking out

by Tina Basu

Time for some fiction in the blog. I am thinking of taking up a 30 day fiction challenge for this month. Let’s see how fruitful it can be. Wish me luck. Today it’s going to be a Five Sentence Fiction based on the prompt from Lillie from
 Lillie McFerrin Writes – House of Five Sentence Fiction. 
And how does it work – you need to write a fiction story in FIVE sentences. – short and sweet. Let’s go for it.

Looking out

“What Mr. Pibbs… don’t pull me, leave me alone, can you?”

Three days in a row Ella hadn’t left her bed, she didn’t feel like doing anything, not after what Connor did to her… how could he call off their wedding just a week before the D-Day!

“Time for your food, eh?”

If not for Mr. Pibbs she would have starved herself to death in the last three days, with the single thought in her mind.


She got up and stood near her huge window… ‘what a bright fresh day’ she thought picking up Mr. Pibbs in her arms… a day to re-start perhaps, no more wasting tears for that jerk, she was now sure of it, ‘thank you my love’ she said planting a kiss on the thick fur of Mr. Pibbs. 

Photo Courtesy – WiseGeek
Today’s prompt – FRESH
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Linking this post to FSF @ Lillie McFerrin and Ultra Blog Challenge Day 1.
I am participating in Write Tribe festival of words #4 Post written for DAY 4 Topic: Being Human – writing an inspirational post.
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48 comments

Donna L. Ward June 1, 2015 - 3:28 pm

This is an excellent example and exercise to improve my writing in all areas – I am going to be saving this as a reminder – thank you 🙂

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joangogreenlivegreen June 1, 2015 - 3:49 pm

Hi Tina 🙂

Love your blog! My first time there 🙂 Enjoyed this post very much, thanks for sharing your thoughts!! Have a great day 🙂

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Preethi Venugopal June 1, 2015 - 3:52 pm

Small yet poignant story. Loved it Tina.
Glad she had at least Mr. Pibbs.

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Anmol Rawat June 1, 2015 - 3:55 pm

Welcome back to writing 🙂
Nice and fresh post.
Glad mr. Pibbs was there for her 🙂

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Tina Basu June 1, 2015 - 4:07 pm

You are welcome Donna thanks for dropping by

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Tina Basu June 1, 2015 - 4:08 pm

Thanks Joan thanks for dropping by. Hope to see you soon again

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Tina Basu June 1, 2015 - 4:09 pm

Thanks Preethi. Yes Mr. Pibbs, true friend

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Tina Basu June 1, 2015 - 4:10 pm

Thanks Anmol,hope to write more

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Mary Hill June 1, 2015 - 6:03 pm

Cute story. Was Mr. Pibbs a dog or cat? Sweet story. 😉

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Esha June 1, 2015 - 6:04 pm

Very refreshingly different…great post…look forward to see more 🙂

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Tina Basu June 1, 2015 - 6:05 pm

Mr. Pibbs is a fuzzy lil cat, girls best friend!

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Tina Basu June 1, 2015 - 6:06 pm

Thanks for dropping by Esha

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Red Handed June 2, 2015 - 1:40 am

Mr.Pibbs seem to be cute!! Way to go 🙂

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Laurel Regan June 2, 2015 - 1:40 am

Lovely! Pets are wonderful. 🙂

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Tarang Sinha June 2, 2015 - 1:40 am

It's wise to leave the excess baggage behind and take a fresh start.

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Ranu June 2, 2015 - 1:41 am

Yes you've done the right thing.

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proudmommaofgirls June 2, 2015 - 1:41 am

YAY! That's a hard challenge to conquer and you did it in flying colors 😀

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bookworm June 2, 2015 - 1:41 am

I've never done one of the five sentence fiction memes. However, I want to stretch myself and try new things on my blog. I think I may give this a try just to see how well I will do. Alana ramblinwitham.blogspot.com

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Barbara Bianchi June 2, 2015 - 1:41 am

Great job! A short little story, but you packed a lot of emotion in there.
~ Barbara @ http://www.glutenfreehomestead.com

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 1:43 am

They are true friends,aren't they?

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 1:43 am

Thanks Red Handed

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 1:45 am

True moving ahead in life is important. Thanks for dropping by.

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 1:45 am

Thanks Ranu.

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 1:47 am

Definitely hard but one needs to move forward. Thanks proud momma of girls

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 1:48 am

I'm sure you will enjoy it Alana

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 1:49 am

Thank you Barbara. Thanks for dropping by.

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Patricia June 2, 2015 - 3:16 am

Good story that could be a true story. Love that Mr. Pibbs saved her. Our fur friends and family often do that.

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 5:20 am

Very true Patricia, our fur friends are often our besties

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Vinitha Dileep June 2, 2015 - 5:30 am

Pets are adorable, and a life saver at times. She is lucky to have Mr.Pibbs in her life. Cute story, Tina. 🙂

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Sweety ( Bubbly Buddy) June 2, 2015 - 9:37 am

A very refreshing tale :-).

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Francene Stanley June 2, 2015 - 10:15 am

Chuckle. You cheated and used a comma to link two sentences. But, your words did the job of sharing a story in almost five sentences.

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Sushree Dash June 2, 2015 - 10:44 am

The ending was a surprise. A very good read 🙂

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 10:46 am

Thanks Vintage, pets are awesome

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 10:46 am

Thanks Sweety

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 10:47 am

That much freedom is granted, thanks for dropping by

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Tina Basu June 2, 2015 - 10:48 am

Thanks Sushree

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K R Smith June 3, 2015 - 12:31 am

I have a cat myself, so I understand! Nice story, with a happy ending – appropriate for the sunny side of life!

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Rashmi karthik June 3, 2015 - 3:36 am

Tina, you conveyed so much writing so little . I loved it 🙂

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Inderpreet Kaur June 3, 2015 - 10:57 am

These are wonderful 5 sentences. I will give it a try too. All the best for the month of fiction.

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Janine Ripper June 3, 2015 - 1:17 pm

There is nothing like the love and comfort of a fur-child 🙂

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vyomi malik June 4, 2015 - 12:16 pm

Oh very nice story!

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Tina Basu June 4, 2015 - 5:50 pm

Thanks Smith

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Tina Basu June 4, 2015 - 5:51 pm

Thanks Rashmi glad you liked it

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Tina Basu June 4, 2015 - 5:51 pm

Thank you so much Inderpreet

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Tina Basu June 4, 2015 - 5:53 pm

Very true Janine

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Tina Basu June 4, 2015 - 5:53 pm

Thanks Vyomi

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Ajay Pai June 7, 2015 - 6:48 am

Loved the narrative, whoever may the pet be.

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Tina Basu June 7, 2015 - 8:37 am

Thanks Ajai, the pet however is a little cat

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