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This post is my entry for Lillie McFerrin Writes Five Sentence Fiction.
Word theme for the current week is LUCKY.
Okay, the fiction bug has hit me, and it has hit me hard. I keep creating situations in my head and pick up traits from every one I meet!! Before it becomes an obsession, I want to quickly pen things down. In the coming times I am going to take up a fiction challenge and want to write only fiction for sometime! Or till I get over with the fiction bug.
My prompt for the week has come from Lillie’s Blog. And here you go. Read and Enjoy. Read my earlier Five Sentence Fiction, and 55Fictions if you like.
The Lucky Man
Jake felt nice meeting his friends at the college re-union party after 6 years, he was doing good professionally unlike many of his classmates, and had everything – a Veyron, a pent house, girls, parties but somewhere inside he still felt empty.
As he watched his friends coming in with their partners, wives and husbands, he noticed that bright face with deep auburn hair framing it, and that infectious smile – they looked still the same, just a little more poised.
The years spent at college replayed within Jake and he knew why he still felt empty, the girl who loved him so much was sitting right across, but she was not his, not his anymore, not after what he did to her, not after all his years of lying and cheating – now she was seated with Ted, her newly wedded man.
Jake walked up to her table and looked at her, the same way he used to back in those days but her face was blank, she didn’t know how to respond, and shook Jake’s hand unwillingly.
Jake patted her husband with a pleasant smile and said softly “You are a Luckyman Ted, take care of your wife, not everyone is so fortunate”.
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Leave a comment below if you liked this short fiction and if you want me to write some more. Your words mean a lot to me.
18 comments
Was it a tongue in the cheek remark?Seems pretty mean of him who had lied and cheated her
haha.. not a tongue in cheek actually. He cheated on someone who loved him, now he has everything but without love. so that's how it connects
Thank you.I am happy you have been caught by a fiction bug.I look forward to loads of short stories.My blog is essentially a story blog.
You are welcome KP, read your series of 55Fiction and quite liked them.
Brilliantly done! I guess we should be thankful that the fiction bug has caught hold of you
Thank you iwrotethose, I hope to write more fictions in the coming weeks. Thanks for the encouragement.
Brilliantly done! We readers are fortunate that the fiction bug has caught hold of you
WEll written 🙂
This was very good. I like how you set the scene, and then the closing. Excellent.
This was very well written. I like how you set the scene, and the closing was excellent. 🙂
Nice story Tina 🙂
Thanks Ananya
Thank you.
Thank you Swathi
You can't just get over some people. Nice.
Nicely written and powerful.
http://mcguffysreader.blogspot.com/2014/03/lucky.html
Thank you Janaki
Thanks Ann