Okay so this one is my third post of the day! And did I call myself not an active blogger??? Anyways, I just got the prompt for the Five Sentence Fiction from Lillie’s blog in my inbox and thought of coming up with a flash fiction before delaying it further and forgetting it altogether!


Here it is.


Read my previous 5 sentence Fictions and other short stories here.

The Inseparable Sisters

Leena & Mahi were inseparable, no one could tell they were first cousins and not own siblings.

There wasn’t a day when they didn’t played together and they visited each other when one was sick, after all that was the advantage of staying next door.

That day when they were playing doll house in Leena’s room, Mahi’s mom rushed and picked her up and left in a hurry before Leena could say a good bye to her friend.

It’s four months now since that dreadful day and the two sisters have not met or spoken a single word to each other.

Their lives and homes are fenced forever because of that silly argument between their fathers and the only thing Leena and Mahi could do was to pray to be together again.


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This post is for Lillie McFerrin Writes Five Sentence Fiction. It’s not actually an entry because the linkly is already closed. Word theme for the current week is FENCED.
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Leave a comment below you liked this short fiction and if you want me to write some more. Your words mean a lot to me. 

Tina Basu

36 Comments on Five Sentence Fiction – The Inseparable Sisters

  1. umangawasthi
    June 19, 2014 at 11:15 pm (2 years ago)

    That's a nice fiction Tina! Short and appropriate to convey your idea. 🙂
    I wish they could be together again!

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  2. Ranu 802
    June 19, 2014 at 11:15 pm (2 years ago)

    Tina this is a wonderful story, though it's sad.

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  3. Adrian George Nicolae
    June 20, 2014 at 3:24 am (2 years ago)

    Nice story.
    But if you merely allude to what Dad said, how do we know it was silly?

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  4. Adrian George Nicolae
    June 20, 2014 at 3:24 am (2 years ago)

    Nice story.
    But if you merely allude to what Dad said, how do we know it was silly?

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  5. Tina Basu
    June 20, 2014 at 3:29 am (2 years ago)

    Hi Adrian thanks for dropping by. I understand your query, but my idea was to state that even if the parents/elders fight/have arguments/have differences kids shouldn't get affected with that nor should there be any restriction on the kids to communicate

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  6. Tina Basu
    June 20, 2014 at 3:30 am (2 years ago)

    So do I Umang, there are times when we see such things around. Thanks for dropping by.

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  7. Crimson Curls
    June 20, 2014 at 4:39 am (2 years ago)

    nice story Tina!
    you have presented the innocent friendship fenced due to elders argument beautifully ! 🙂

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  8. thelastkrystallos
    June 22, 2014 at 1:18 am (2 years ago)

    It's sad when families fall out…definitely causes fences…

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  9. janaki nagaraj
    June 22, 2014 at 1:18 am (2 years ago)

    People fight for flimsiest reasons and it is others who have to bear the burnt. Nice one.

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  10. cammies on the floor
    June 22, 2014 at 4:22 pm (2 years ago)

    So sad how this happens. You did such a great job to write from the perspective that you did.

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  11. Vinodini Iyer
    June 22, 2014 at 4:22 pm (2 years ago)

    oh that was such a petty reason for the girls to separate! We adults are often so not thoughtful when it comes to such situations.
    Interesting read 🙂

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  12. shailajav
    June 23, 2014 at 8:01 am (2 years ago)

    Awww, how sad for them. We adults erect the most ridiculous fences, I tell you!

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  13. Shilpa Gupte
    June 23, 2014 at 4:38 pm (2 years ago)

    Sad, but a fact……many innocent souls get separated from each other over such trivial issues….it can be heart breaking!!

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  14. Uma
    June 23, 2014 at 4:38 pm (2 years ago)

    Sad for the cousins..maybe they could re-unite the families later on?

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  15. A
    June 24, 2014 at 12:51 am (2 years ago)

    Good take on the prompt Tina. Sadly, it's all the more true in India, where families get into tiffs over silly reasons.

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  16. Shail Mohan
    June 24, 2014 at 3:36 am (2 years ago)

    This happens so often, doesn't it? And it is really sad that it does.

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  17. Soumya
    June 24, 2014 at 7:31 am (2 years ago)

    Oh perfect Indian tale this one 🙂

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  18. Kalpana Solsi
    June 25, 2014 at 1:07 am (2 years ago)

    The elders of the family fought and the younger ones had to bear the brunt.Not fair.

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  19. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:22 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks Crimson Curls, its sad when elders do not try to understand friendship or relationships

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  20. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:22 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks for dropping by Thelastkrystallos

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  21. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:25 am (2 years ago)

    Yes Donna, in my story they definitely will 🙂

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  22. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:26 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks Janaki

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  23. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:27 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks for your kind words Cammies on the floor.

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  24. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:28 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks Vinodini

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  25. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:29 am (2 years ago)

    Shailajav, you are so true, all problem starts when people turn adults, loss of innocence doesn't do much good

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  26. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:30 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks Shilpa

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  27. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:31 am (2 years ago)

    Yes they would if i write down the story 🙂

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  28. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:33 am (2 years ago)

    Yes it does Shail and it shouldn't, not at a level that innocence gets affected

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  29. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:35 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks Soumya

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  30. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:36 am (2 years ago)

    Thanks संजय

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  31. Tina Basu
    June 25, 2014 at 4:37 am (2 years ago)

    Yes Kalpana, in reality when things like these happen they are never fair. Thanks for dropping by

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  32. Reema D'souza
    June 26, 2014 at 4:23 am (2 years ago)

    Nice story. Simple but with so much meaning. And as you said it is a prequel to my story 😀

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